First Draft and Response

We showed our class and teachers our first draft and they told us what they liked about our trailer and what we could improve. Our first draft had not yet been completed as the intertitles were not entirely in place and we did not yet have a title scene.

Positive Feedback:

• Fast pace of the montage, adds adrenaline.
• Good storyline to work with, will attract demographic.
• Good variation of camera shots and angles.
• Quick cuts to the barn.

What To Improve:

• Make title evident/change title to be more effective.
• Work on sound with conversation at end of trailer.
• Improve intertitles to help make story more clear.
• Cut down certain scenes to make trailer flow at an even faster pace.